This week we started writing a descriptive piece of writing... Here is the picture that we had to base our piece of writing around. Here is my piece of writing and some brainstorming... I am not quite finished my writing...
Hi Kaleb Its Morgan here. Wow that is great I really like how you said "The trickling water slowly and softly flowing down stream picking up any loose rocks and sticks and taking hem". I think that this is a Fabulous piece of writing. E noho ra bye
Hi Kaleb. Wow thats a great piece of writing. You used a lot of great descriptive words. I really enjoyed reading this as you made it very exciting. I like how you described the illuminated shadow of the girl disappears. Great job. Mya.
Kia Ora Kaleb Thank you so much for including your brainstorm as it gives me an idea of where you got your ideas from. It was great that you worked through the senses. My favourite one of this is smell: I smell the dark blood red flowers. It is good that you managed to put this into your story as well. I hope you were able to write like this in your writing test. Nga mihi Mrs England
Hi Kaleb Its Morgan here. Wow that is great I really like how you said "The trickling water slowly and softly flowing down stream picking up any loose rocks and sticks and taking hem". I think that this is a Fabulous piece of writing. E noho ra bye
ReplyDeleteHi Kaleb.
ReplyDeleteWow thats a great piece of writing. You used a lot of great descriptive words. I really enjoyed reading this as you made it very exciting. I like how you described the illuminated shadow of the girl disappears.
Great job.
Mya.
Kia Ora Kaleb
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for including your brainstorm as it gives me an idea of where you got your ideas from. It was great that you worked through the senses. My favourite one of this is smell: I smell the dark blood red flowers. It is good that you managed to put this into your story as well.
I hope you were able to write like this in your writing test.
Nga mihi
Mrs England